Pt. 1 Ch. 2 - Page 12

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MistakeNPotatoes
6th Feb 2015, 11:04 AM

Ch-chung!

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Taily
6th Feb 2015, 11:15 AM

OOOH, CLARA. What a sassy mama. I'm liking her more all the time.

Wonderful background in panel 5, by the way.

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MistakeNPotatoes
6th Feb 2015, 12:03 PM

She's kinda tired of Chase's crap at this point, heheh. And thanks, I was trying out something different, wasn't sure if I got what I was going for. Still not sure, heh.

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ProfEtheric
6th Feb 2015, 11:47 AM

Ch-chung is almost never a good sound.

And I'm kinda getting tired of Chase's "we don't have time to hear it" attitude. I'm not suggesting that you stop writing him like that, but he's turning out to be the guy that makes me root for the monster to chow down. Especially since I DO WANT TO HEAR IT, and ignorance will kill ya quicker than a bullet in any horror scenario, including Lovecraftian ones.

If this page was done during your slump, than I'll gladly take your slump, man. You're still making me jealous.

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MistakeNPotatoes
6th Feb 2015, 12:02 PM

I was actually kinda worried about that - I'm considering redoing the dialogue on this page to make him just a hint less whiny, but when I was writing it I was trying to be in the mindset of a guy in a hostile town trying to find his brother. I dunno, I think you're right, I might re-do this page and secretly re-upload it later, heh.

And yeah, it was, I guess my slump isn't necessarily affecting the comic too badly, just my attitude towards it. I feel really lazy when I don't do a lot of *real* backgrounds.

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Taily
6th Feb 2015, 1:57 PM

I agree with the Prof about Chase coming off as a bit of a brusque jerk, but in my opinion it's more about his expressions than the actual dialogue?? Like, looking at the dialogue in isolation here, I feel totally sympathetic towards the guy. They're in a delicate spot, this lady is going off about maps, and they legitimately do not have the time to dilly-dally. His little "heh, sorry" moment is also nice, because hey, he's acknowledging his hypocrisy.
But when I see his face, those sympathetic feelings die out, because he's looking kinda blasé about this entire thing. I'm not reading in his expressions that he really believes that the stakes are high (and the stakes are pretty dang high here!), so it becomes harder for me to justify him not giving a crap about Clara's discovery.
Just my two cents on it!!

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MistakeNPotatoes
6th Feb 2015, 5:34 PM

Yeah, I can see what you mean. Originally I was going for someone that's cool under pressure but he's starting to lose it, but I'm afraid I'm kinda letting that expression bleed into everything. I'm kinda damned in this regard for a few weeks, now, since the pages are already done, but I think I'm gonna try and workshop Chase, and other character's facial expressions to try and unlock a broader spectrum. That might help with the believability a bit, I think.

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Holodrum
9th Feb 2015, 2:34 PM

So a brother it is? hmm...

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MistakeNPotatoes
9th Feb 2015, 2:39 PM

Ha ha! I would hide it, but it's about to be revealed within a couple weeks, so.

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Skweeee
7th Feb 2015, 11:56 AM

OH! OH! I think I know what's inside those markings!!!!

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MistakeNPotatoes
7th Feb 2015, 11:56 PM

SPOILERS MAN

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Jackarais
29th Jan 2018, 7:43 PM

The bubble placement on the 2nd to last panel had me reading them backwards. @_@

Otherwise, another great page. WHAT THE HECK HAVE THEY FOUND WHAT'S GOIN ON

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