pt. 1 ch. 10 - Page 29
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Mgnostic
23rd Feb 2018, 12:28 PM

So many thoughts!
Irwin has bedroom eyes...how did he get past the matron in a women's dormitory?

Prehensile toes, gotta love'em.

The bottom panel just rocks. It's dynamic and has an interesting visual depth. Clara's hair is cool. It has the artist's ownstyle but reminds me of Carter from "Riven Sol".

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MistakeNPotatoes
23rd Feb 2018, 1:57 PM

He got there by teleporting! Thigg enables this :D

And yeah, Jack's feet are quite useful, compared to his hands.. also, thanks! That last panel was definitely my favorite part. I tried some new stuff here, I'm iffy on some of it, but the last panel is a good payoff for the experimentation :)

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corporal8
23rd Feb 2018, 1:15 PM

Jack...is just not very lucky. Quite certain this is not going to work out just as he plans. Of course, that will mean Irwin will also have to reveal his surprise much sooner than he planned. Great twist! Looking forward to the next page.

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MistakeNPotatoes
23rd Feb 2018, 1:57 PM

Exactly what I was shooting for. I hope that this scene pays off in a way that excites people :)

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...(RockB)
23rd Feb 2018, 3:45 PM

My thoughts exactly! Jack's bad luck is extreme.

Lovely twist! That's how to do it.

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MadJak91
23rd Feb 2018, 1:28 PM

Whoa whoa whoa... Is Irwin sure about this? Is Jack sure about this? Even she was not convinced completely, now she is.

This does not mean Irwin has to reveal his current state but when you are presumed dead AND you are probably going to fight Jack then you definitely know more.

This complicates things. Clara might accept him. Not so sure about Chase but yes, that remains to be seen :D

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MistakeNPotatoes
23rd Feb 2018, 2:13 PM

Yeah, I wanted everything to suddenly become more complex for everyone involved... sounds like it's working :D

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MistakeNPotatoes
23rd Feb 2018, 2:14 PM

Byakhees crashing through your window or a smooth jazz record, which gets you in the mood faster?

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Dromicosuchus
23rd Feb 2018, 1:37 PM

...Oh, Jack.

Just...Oh, Jack.

His timing is so abysmally, spectacularly, monumentally bad here, and he looks SO very confident and proud of himself. You can see the satisfaction with himself in every line of his face. He KNOWS that he’s done well, that his stealth has been perfect, that he’s been patient and wise and cunning and careful, just like Jaunt would want. Jaunt is going to be so proud of him. He KNOWS this.

It’s not his fault, but...Oh, Jack.

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Sturzkampf
23rd Feb 2018, 2:40 PM

But how is Irwin going to Save The Girl without her finding out about Thigg? But maybe she’ll be up for a threesome.

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MadJak91
27th Feb 2018, 8:59 AM

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That Guy Over There
24th Feb 2018, 2:04 AM

That awkward moment when your stalker meets your ex.

On a more serious note, Irwin's face seems somehow... off. Maybe because he's actually smiling. I don't think we've ever actually seen him smile before. It's almost unnerving.

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MistakeNPotatoes
24th Feb 2018, 7:28 AM

Pfffhahaha! :D

Yeah, Irwin does look a little off. I was wrestling with that expression for a bit, because it's not just his desire to see Clara now, it's also Thiggs, so it's a little amplified.

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Mgnostic
28th Feb 2018, 10:33 AM

i think Irwin has that hope mixed with fear of rejection vibe going on pretty well.

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Taily
24th Feb 2018, 10:02 AM

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MistakeNPotatoes
26th Feb 2018, 6:49 PM

No... I totally forgot. It's been like two years and I totally forgot to put the sound effect in. I'm a monster D:

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Mikey
25th Feb 2018, 9:26 AM

Is it me

Or does it look like Irwin is not himself...as in is Thigg in control?

Just my thoughts

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MistakeNPotatoes
26th Feb 2018, 6:53 PM

Neither Thigg or Irwin is fully in control of themselves at this point, I don't think. They're sort of melding into one - the face, though, is partly just a screw up in execution on my part. I didn't quite nail the weird, hazy happiness that Irwin is experiencing, heh.

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Myetel
25th Feb 2018, 12:29 PM

Regarding Irwin, I think it's mostly that his hair's fluffier than normal that shifts the overall look of his face. (Thigg introduced him to product? :D)

When you're now a symbiotic life-form, three's company is just, um, how it's going to be, going forward in any relationship. Hopefully Clara's adaptable and open-minded?

I'll be honest; I thought Jack burst in *BECAUSE* Irwin was there. That he'd have maintained stealth and just kept watching till she got out the amulet, etc., and that his motivation for the crashing entry was "Holy crap, that's the not-so-dead guy who attacked Jaunt and Hugh!"

But I'm guessing from the commentary that this was wrong. :-/

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MistakeNPotatoes
26th Feb 2018, 7:02 PM

I'm seeing holes in my execution through this whole chapter. I tried different approaches to storytelling and I think I messed up a bit, but hopefully I can get it all cleared up.

Irwin's a little floofed up, yeah - probably wanted to look more presentable somehow. The idea is they've been out in time and space somewhere, who knows how long for them, Irwin's been away from the normal tools to groom himself so he's doing what he can with what tools he has available.

The face was poorly executed in the panel, due to a number of factors, I'm sure, but I only have myself to blame in the end.

Jack is there to kill Clara. He has located where she and Chase live, so tonight his plan is to kill them both. He's been doing well so far, but when it comes to the act, it turns out Irwin is here and probably has an issue with what Jack wants to do..

Hopefully that clears some things up. Sorry. I'll try to do better in the future!

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MadJak91
27th Feb 2018, 9:00 AM

tbh, he really looks more like JonTron there for real :D
I noticed that right away :D

Eh, happens!

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Bob Mozark
25th Feb 2018, 1:15 PM

Now we will never know what was Jack's original intention towards Clara. When she has some time for reflection, she will have to realize that the dormitory is no longer her safe haven.

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MistakeNPotatoes
26th Feb 2018, 10:47 PM

I think his intentions are fairly clear :D

But Irwin has something to say about it, most likely...

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Liz D-M
28th Feb 2018, 7:17 AM

After this, Clara's going to need a bottle or two of bathtub gin.

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