pt. 1 ch. 12 - Page 1

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MistakeNPotatoes
17th Oct 2018, 10:30 AM

Here we are - page one!

So, something I'm trying in this new chapter is speeding less interesting parts of the plot along. There's still going to be discussions with some exposition in them, but I'm trying to shorten the parts we don't NEED to see. I think I've done okay so far, but bear with me while I figure this whole thing out.

I really want to get things rolling as they move inevitably towards the climax of the story.

Have a good week, all :)

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Thracecius
17th Oct 2018, 12:01 PM

Looking forward to seeing where this leads us! :)

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MistakeNPotatoes
17th Oct 2018, 12:45 PM

I do hope it pays off the way I want it to :)

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MadJak91
17th Oct 2018, 1:10 PM

hrrh, Clara has like THE best haircut right now. Approved :>
I mean that objectively and I am not accepting any fights or disputes ;)
lmao

So was "Care for a drink?" back in those days automatically about alcoholic drinks? Because I am always offered plain water right away on appointments, lmao. Tsk. People got softer :Y
(not that I drink at all in the first place but yeah)

;D

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MistakeNPotatoes
17th Oct 2018, 7:28 PM

It's a little out of the time period but.. gosh I hate drawing boring hair. I want to draw like, 80s hair, hah!

It could mean either thing, really, it could be she just knows he likes to sneak whiskey into his office ;)

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Mgnostic
18th Oct 2018, 9:26 AM

I think Clara's hairstyle works for the time period. It fits in the range of what would be described as "bobbed hair" popular among young women in the mid to late 1920's. Overall you have created a look for your comic that depicts your version of the Lovecraftian universeso you can pretty much go with what you feel is consistent with your story.
Given that this was an era of prohibition, offering Clara a drink is stronger social statement than it would be today. The actual meaning would be highly dependent on circumstances.

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knyghtmarev3
17th Oct 2018, 1:45 PM

Great page. The dialog in the last panel a bit jarring. Might work better if she said "I believe it is serious."

Just a suggestion :-)

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MistakeNPotatoes
17th Oct 2018, 7:28 PM

Oh sure - I think it will work better on a full readthrough, it feeds directly into the next page. Damn webcomic pacing.

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Bob Mozark
18th Oct 2018, 11:35 AM

I agree that the bobbed hairdo suits Clare as a modern 1920s independent woman. It also looks good under a cloche hat, which was very stylish at that time.

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